Dargquon Ql'deleodna

this is awsome hunter, i really like this, and it is serious and yet halarious with mike's antics and drunk stupidity. i can't wait to read more about what happpens ...

this has great potential , and is a very good start, but as brian stressed PUNTUATION, and spell check would be nice. i love the story line, but i beleive ...

i like this, it was a little hard to understand and it got a bit confusing at time when you changed points of veiw, it was also a little hard ...

this is a very good peice of work fontroy, it seems though as if things are happening too suddenly, first hes a good bard, right after that king forces him ...

‘Who the hell are you?’, he choked. I grabbed a cushion as the bullet went though the careful stitching and into the man’s chest. ‘Happy Birthday’, I said. I walked ...

this is cool, a good start, try to work on it more, because it left me hanging, and i would like to know more about the character and her background ...

i thought it was good, i liked the part that started with all why's, the rest was .............. anyway i feel you pain, a freind of my sisters (she was ...

wow, this is really good, it shows great potential. this will be knew, because alot of the book i read about aleins attacking humans is from the humans point of ...

damn, that is really good.... that describes how i felt when my "best" freind left, when he acted like a jerk, when he would stop being mean, had to attack ...

ahhhhh the language of a frustrated 11 year old...now we can just refer to your poem when we felling like saying all that shit without saying it. i probably knew ...

The title was a prompt given at my writers group. Here's what I came up with. Shopping sucks. I hate shopping. Used to love it when I was in middle ...

this is a good start, but in my opinion very random.... she's waiting for her mom to get home...she hears sirens...has a shot gun (what the heck)....falling and goes cuckoo. ...

i thougth that was awsome. i understood all of it "Show me that fun, Doesn’t come in a pill," And here: "Don’t let me surrender, My life for a thrill," ...

good and descriptive, but in my opinion very, very weird. i suggest putting some age #+ to warn other and younger readers of the contents of this story. :shock: please ...

that was confusing and hard to follow, it seemed as if you were writing two different stories at one time. there needs to be some connection beween the man and ...